Our thoughts

The feedback made us aware that the audience may not always understand that there are two things going on at once; showing the girl happy and sad at different times.
We are pleased with the outcome of our abstract shots and the ending when we ssee the alarm flashing as it is a good way to then lead on into the film.
In one shot we have Hannan sitting infront of a poster saying "slash" representing death and darkness, this is called iconography.

6:15 - Our final thriller

feedback criteria

cinematography:
- did the angles create a dramatic/confusing effect?
yes, it provided a hectic/dramatic effect which eventually pieced together.
yes,very confusing
yes,we dont understand the storyline
yes they were unclear

-do you think the camera angles/shots are suitable?
yes, it allowed the pieces to come together gradually
nothing wrong with them
yes,very appropriate- maybe a stalker effect
yes we like the one when its in the bag

editing:
-do you think the montage(choppy) editing worked well?
yes suitable cinematography
yes because it kept the sequence moving and confusing
yes showed the audience enough in the short space of time to get vague idea of piece

-do you think the cuts/transitions were an appropriate choice?
provided a fast paced feel
yes they added to the pace of the scene
fast moving-very effective
yes as it add to immediate effect

sound:
-is the sound appropriate to the genre?
doesnt create tension but is fast paced..maybe no drum beat?
yes worked well-fast
yes
yes

-do you think it gets boring/repetitive?
soundwise yes but the filming is not
slightly repetitive but not boring
not really the music and clips fit together well

mise en scene:
-is there anything shown that isnt appropriate?
it all fits
no
not boring however chganges dramatically
going in house..generally all clips work well

-do you think the abstract clips were effective?
broke up the other clips well
yes, as it makes you want to watch more to find out what it was
yes as it makes it confusing

overall effect:
-does it appeal to both genders?
yes it does
no..more for girls
cant see why it would appeal to males
mainly girls as all characters are girls

-would you watch the film?
to descover where it went-yes
yes
no unless the missus made us
yes to answer the questions posed

Response to feedback

After reading the very useful feedback we were given after showing the class the rough cut, it came to our attention that we needed to make our title shot seem a little more interesting, so we made it shorter and applied a transition. Other wise the feedback was mostly good and we seemed to have received a good response.

Changes

We have decided not to include the scene where the girl hangs herself, mainly because
it was too difficult to find a way of doing it.

We tried to make it look like she was being hung by just havin a shot of her feet hanging as she sat down. This, however didn't work very well because it was too obvious that the main character was sitting down and not being hung.

feedback

Feedback:

Use of mise en scene
-like the use of the bag
-zip from bag worked well
-all worked well in combination e.g. book and writing
-book, writing worked well

Cinematography
-shakiness of shots work well and quick, unclear shots
-love the running shots
-blurred shots add to the atmosphere
-some shots didn't make sense
-like the scenes with very dark people and bright background

Editing
-6.15 clip could be shorter
-like the running scenes, good transitions

Sound
-like the static
-like the constant repetition
-static sound didn't go with the music
-very fast-provides hectic feel. I liked it.

Genre conventions
-we like the quick editing
-confused about black shot
-Good. Provides hectic feel. Quick.

rough cut video